Umut Çağrı Işılak
FLE 133.02
Reflection Task 3
If I will choose the person
of the year, I look the criteria in humanistic ways. For example, whether
he/she help people or not, or if he/she is rich, I look whether he/she donate
for somebody who needs money. I mean, generally, I look for how he/she makes an
effort for today’s world and people.
I think the person of the
year should be Cristiano Ronaldo, soccer player for Real Madrid. Because of the
place and time where he grew up, he did great things for years, and this year
he continued to do the great works. Cristiano’s behaviours based on the place
where he grew up, his economic class and the culture he grew up in. He grew up
in a poor area in Portugal in which he had to work very hard to make money and
survive. Moreover, Cristiano doesn’t use alcohol because he said that his
father died because of alcohol. This shows the loyal side of Cristiano. That’s
why he tries to be a perfect father for his son. Then, he helped the
Palestinians who were in war. There are more examples and I want to talk about
them. Carlos Tevez, old team friend of Cristiano Ronaldo, told it: “I asked the
whole team for surgeon money for my son. No one said nothing, but the next day
I found money in my account for surgeon which was given by Cristiano. In
addition, he helped a lot of children who need money for surgeon. He does these
helps without any questioning, because he loves children and he remembers how
he grew up. These are just what we heard from media. Maybe, there are many
things Cristiano did, but we don’t know. As well as, maybe, the best person, he
is one the best soccer players in the world, because he never give up working.
The reason for his great work ethic is his early success as a player. In his
teens and early twenties, by working hard, Cristiano won many trophies,
personal awards and was paid very well.
In conclusion, he is not only
a good person but also he is a hardworking soccer player. I didn’t hear a bad
side of Cristiano from the media till now. That’s why he can be a candidate for
the person of the year.
Dear Çağrı,
YanıtlaSilI liked your style of writing. Although you haven't got a good combination of writing, your writing is quite fluent. You are good at expressing your own opinions. You have a clear way of putting your ideas into sentences.I am not very much into football, but I begin to admire Ronaldo as a footballer and as an altruistic man. I want to thank you very much. You are so persuasive. There are a few grammar mistakes. Instead of ''if I will choose'', you had better use ''if I chose''. The correct form of the sentence should be like this, ''if I chose..., I would...''. In other words, here we need unreal present structure. By writing ''because of the place and the time'', what did you mean? By the way, third person singular in present simple takes ''-s''. Instead of ''I didn’t hear a bad side of Cristiano'', it is better to write I haven't heard...Before submitting your task, you ought to have checked your spelling and grammar mistakes, and you should have paid attention to your language use and planning. All in all, don't lose your enthusiasm in writing. I wish you good luck in your future writing reflection tasks. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us!